ØPoor:
Dear Prof. Shneiderman: Attached is my PhD proposal, please tell me what you think.
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ØBetter:
Dear Prof. Shneiderman: I am a Computer Science
PhD student at Imperial College. My
advisor, Prof. Spence, knows you and I
have read your papers. My work extends your concept of dynamic queries. I’ve
attached my 2-page doctoral proposal in the hopes that you can give me your comments before I defend it
in two weeks.
Your input would be acknowledged and
Dr. Spence would be glad to pay for your plane ticket
to join the committee meeting.